Emily's Adventures

WHy does your rival always pick the Pokémon to beat You?,ITS UN COOL AND UNFAIR,Anyways nice story man i like it,

 

Review on Parts 1-3 for Ch. 1:

While entertaining, the parts were rather short. Together as a whole, it'd feel more like a chapter. However, the parts felt very bare bones. The starter battle between Totodile and Cyndaquil was a little lack luster. By looking at the movesets, Totodile would have learned Water Gun before Bite. If you were going by level 5 moves, I would have stuck with Scratch and Tackle. The shiny Teddiursa was an interesting encounter, but I was a bit disappointed that she didn't catch it. The encounter seemed a little out of nowhere. The chapter parts also seemed very dialogue heavy. There wasn't much meat on the bones for detail. The customized region also left me in the dark. A little more explanation about the region and it's history would be nice. Is it near Johto? Who is Professor Maple? It leaves a lot of questions than answers. The writing style is okay, but also needs work.

Overall, it's an okay start. For the next parts, a little more detail would be much appreciated.