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Hilda White's Poetic Insight (Poem(s) Thread)

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    Just to get the ball rolling. I've been a writer for 5 years now.
    I sometimes write songs, but mainly, my jam is poems.

    dark ones, I am known for. But I can easily write to any theme given, enough prep work.

    I am also a poetry teacher by trade/though unofficially paid (as of yet)


    The Warm Touch Of Serenaded Honey
    I will love you forever and a day.
    If I could touch your memory, let it sing out proud!
    Nonsensical and sticky is the aura surrounding me
    I notice a change in the weather's patterns
    Forecasted a beautiful harmony of music
    Dripping wet on my mind, sugar spun hills give out tempting offerings.
    Not worth sighing away the heat, it gives a sensation of trust.
    Within myself, I value the trials I must endure
    An image worth keeping, long for its embrace until night comes.

    Sleepless Nights and Haunted Memories
    My dreams escape me through a florescent needle
    Burning crystals sink deeper into my head.
    Still I stir from overbearing nightmares
    It's the scent of hopelessness in the air, the stench of failure
    I repel all around me when I awaken
    Lingering in the darkness, eternally lost to the desperation within.
    Savour the last drawn breath.
    My tears cannot reach you. They fade into the scenery I helped formulate.
    An image of death. Painted onto the canvas of loneliness.

    Cruelty of the Silent Curtain
    Admiring the storm from a distance.
    The colours torn away, lost in its own brilliance
    A smile is revealed through the cracks of a wall.
    Shining on a rough surface of glass.
    Blinding all that meet its gaze.
    I inject a wave of nausea into its skin.
    To let it unfold its façade upon the world.
    Merciless hymns reign in my ear
    I spiral out of control, soaked in the flood of misery.
    Wet and tired, I lie perfectly still
    Waiting for the vultures to feed on my ripe flesh.
    Beauty Runs Wire-Thin in Solace
    Breathe through me when I am fallen.
    Not an angel in angst or a maiden in hollowed
    I am beauty's embodiment
    My warmth holds true when the setting is pitched.
    Keep me alive for it was our promise we made.
    Sworn to protect the children of pure functionality
    Gifted to the light when night hits past.
    My kiss is tender, my painlessness embracing
    Twilight is the chosen route of all hindrance
    Inflamed heart awaken in me.

    Dawn of the Souless
    A Lovely day to consider self destruction
    Falling on the sword, the facade is great.
    Suffocating my rage in a mist, hallucinations follow thereafter
    Behind the time to kill, when it stops I myself become redundant
    Hunger for the way forward, not certain of my imprint on the foolish.
    When I become whole, the cancer will spread, finishing me.
    All down in my throat, I cannot utter a whisper.
    Laid out to be displayed on the floors of extinction.

    Knives in the Forgotten Flag
    The final chapter nears, spread throughout the soil like roots.
    From many helping hands, practiced until perfect
    Whistling along to the overlapping groove
    Backed in a corner of obtuse repetition
    Psyche shot to sympathised instrumentals , left to defend my own honor
    I realize I am not in the calm, but in a state of confliction
    Sweaty palms, dreading the relapses.
    Carved into the remaining figment of my own bliss

    Inner Struggles of the Leech
    My strength sapped by mosquitoes of war.
    Hard-pressed to engrave written symbols into moving wilderness
    That is where I always wanted to be, among the stars to freedom.
    By myself, sickles of transgression shun me painless in yearning
    The tragedies unfold before me, I hear no voices to say I was wrong
    I'm waiting for you to close the closet to my lucid dreams
    The game of chance never ends when risks are ever-growing.
    Out of nowhere, the coils entrust to me a task.
    To become an enigma in the den of spectres

    Sweet Misery
    The days when my words cannot touch your lips, I fear this every time I seek slumber.
    I died just a little, I believe that I cried when the clock struck your nerves
    You're the one I needed most and now that has been lost to the storms.
    I thank you for giving my heart a beat and a smile on my face.
    While it lasted, you were here with me, not forgetting the lovelier moments together.
    Drawn out your emotions, I let them fade into the scenery, which painted our lives.

    Harlequin Woods
    I was betrayed in a brief absence of rejection
    I did not conceive the genes in my veins
    Hopeful voices lingered in my headspace
    Eager ties to the delirious extinguished
    Deep incisions grow larger with every passing stroke
    I am insane when my behaviour becomes formed in calligraphy.
    Hiccups blow away any sign of focus
    Wasteful rubs of salt bind me to the ground
    Specks of vinegar add to my worries and drag out even longer.
    Grieving in the vineyard by myself at dusk.
     
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    Those poems are anazing!! You are a pretty good writer. I just saw your status update and directly came here. I like reading and it is awesome!! Great work!
     
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    Thanks! Sadly, my work goes unrecognised for the most part.
    I guess people are afraid, I'd take feedback the wrong way or the like?

    Do you have a favourite?

    @[member="Pokémist"]
     
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    If you are talking about your poems i liked every poem. They have a deep meaning hidden in them even if they are litle negitive. Hmm...... My favourite, it will be... Dawn of souless, sweet misery and i liked cruelty of silent curtain.
     
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    I tend to have shifts in mood a lot of the time.
    Dark poetry seems to strike more of a cord with me.
    I can do brighter works too.

    Just the place darkness takes me.
    it's a comforting realm. IMO.

    I have a blurred sense of reality when I write.
    it takes me to unheard of lands and of merit.

    Thanks for the feedback. Sweet Misery was a favourite with a lot of people.
    Be sure to tell your friends about my work.
    The more people get to know my works, the more they know me inside and out.
     
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    A fantastic talent you have on display,​
    One that I shall attempt to replicate,​
    if I may?​

    My favorite of the titles here would be​
    "Dawn of the Soulless" and "Sweet Misery"​

    The others are great, but the symbolism is deep,​
    and I'm afraid that for me​
    it's beyond my reach.​

    I tend to prefer structure to free form,​
    but you make it look so good.​
    Perhaps I should stretch and see what ​
    growth I can find from these.​

    (Wow, that's a lot harder than I thought, and I knew it would be tough.)
     
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    I was taught by a few mentors here and there.
    They knew a lot to guide me through.

    The rest was flat out research.
    Thanks for your kind words. : )
    it's always appreciated.
     
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    Might as well update this, with a poem I put in for a contest.

    I wrote this yesterday for a "music box" song contest
    or poetry contest, whichever you like.


    Fire in my Heartbeat
    Boldest is the rapture
    a broken promise never kept
    Stronger still is the fire within
    a smoothest silk

    when time permits, I end all bonds
    neither broken or vanished
    just sealed away
    in the cave
    deepest in my heart

    the fire within
    a choir of angels flicker
    out into the open seas
    a sage appears

    to grant a wish to the forgotten
    the lost lamb
    the wolf in sheep's clothing

    to appear in a dream
    to disappear in a mere blink of an eye

    the war of worlds in my darkest nightmares
    the fire within a thousand folded
    to be told in secret
    to my children's children
    the legacy of those to come
    heroes in waiting

    A new born chaos
    anarchy on the field
    a misadventure
    a fractured hand
    gone astray

    is the way forward
    looking to the past
    a moment later it is gone
    forevermore

    a prayer goes unanswered
     
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    Wow wow wow wow wow!

    What should I say? I am speechless. Its awesome. Great as always. I am pretty sure you will win in the contest cause its its....fabulous!
     
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    Nope. Someone beat me and there is only first place in this contest.

    @Pokémist

    Starving of Mind

    I am starving of mind, my freedom forever tarnished

    The dead realm is where I call home

    All alone, ridiculed on a constant basis

    With naught to prove, all room for error

    I am a butterfly without wings

    A shell of my former days

    The way forward is into the unknown

    A void of lifeless dreams

    The stars unite and I am bestowed

    The gift of free will

    A conscious of my own

    To speak my thoughts

    To right my wrongs

    Within the shrine of time

    This is another one I did for another forum AGAIN.
    This one was against 23 other entries... O.o

    I only got 4 votes too. : /
     
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