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Pokemon Black and White: The Secret of The Legendary PokemonPrincess!- Chapter 1: Her Journey Contin

Discussion in 'Literature Library' started by CilanLover15, Jan 28, 2015.

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  1. CilanLover15

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    It has been just a few months, and our new adventurer, Onyx, had left
    her home, where her parents, her sister and her cousin were living.
    she had already won all the eight badges and even she had won the
    Unova League. she was so happy now. by her side, she had her
    trusting friend and partner Glameow.
    "Phew. i can't believe it that i won the League! i'll go to a Pokémon
    Center and call mom!"- Onyx said all happy.
    "Meow Meow." Glameow meowed happily.
    Onyx then reached to Nimbasa City. she finally found a Pokémon
    Center and entered in there.
    then, a pink- haired girl with blue eyes greeted her. It was Nurse Joy,
    one of Onyx's best friends.
    "Hi Onyx! how has been everything?" Nurse Joy asked while smiling.

    "It has been wonderful! i won the Unova League!" Onyx told to her.

    "That's more than wonderful! congratulations!" Nurse Joy said.

    "Thanks! oh, and if you excuse me, i'll call my mom to see how things
    are at home." Onyx said while typing the number. she waited a little
    seconds, and...voila! there was her mother Vanessa.

    "Hi mom!"

    "Hello, sweetie! how's everything going?"- Vanessa, Onyx's mother
    asked.

    "Everything here on the Unova region is wonderful!!! i don't want to
    leave this! and guess what? i won the League!!"

    "Really?!!! my sweetie!!! i'm so happy for you!!! congratulations!"

    "Thanks mom! oh, how's the family going?"

    "it's going very well, Onyx. thanks."

    "Cool. well, mom, i have to leave, some more adventures are waiting
    for me."

    "Ok. take care, honey!"
    and then, the call ended.

    "Oh, before i leave, Nurse Joy. can you heal my Pokémon?" Onyx
    asked.

    "sure! give me your pokéballs and they'll be fine. it might take a little
    time."

    "I'll wait. don't worry."
    a few seconds later...

    "Here they are! they are fully healed!"

    "Thanks! well, bye!"

    "Bye, Onyx! have fun and take care!"

    as she left the center...after a few minutes later of walking..she
    reached to some part of some forest. then...she heard some bushes
    moving...she got scared a little...

    "Who's there?" Onyx asked.

    then...out of nowhere....a kind of box captured her and Glameow!
    "What the?!" Onyx asked and then...she heard not one sinister
    laugh...it were to sinister laughs....

    "Oh no....not again..."

    "hahaha!!! we finally got you, Onyx!"

    "Damn you, Team Rocket!!!"
     
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    Onyx growled in pure anger, even Glameow. both of them were really
    angry.

    "Why the hell you do this again? i know that you always fail!!!" Onyx
    said in pure anger.

    "We're not going to fail this time! since now we caught you, you'll be
    an excellent experiment for our team!" Meowth said while smiling all
    evilly.

    "Hah! in your dreams! i'm not going to be your lab toy for that! forget
    it, you're going to fail." Onyx said while having a 'in your face, loser'
    face.

    "Glameow, use Iron Tail!!!!"

    Glameow used the iron tail, but the trap wasn't broken.

    "One more time, Glameow!!!" Onyx commanded.

    she did it tons of times, but it was useless!!
    "hahahaha! you and your Glameow can't escape now. this trap is made
    with a strong material that it can't be broken." Jessie said all evilly.
    Onyx gasped and got in fear.

    "somebody help me!!!" Onyx yelled.
    meanwhile...

    in a near part of the forest, our heroes were on their way to Driftveil
    City to reach to the gym so Ash could win his next badge. but then...
    they heard something...
    "What was that?" Iris asked, while trying to listen.

    "I don't know what it is. we should check it out." Cilan said and went
    to see what it was happening.
    now, they went to see what it was....then....they all gasped. they saw a
    black haired girl with a Glameow all trapped on a very known trap.

    "Team Rocket!!! what are you doing here?!"

    "Too late, little kids! we already caught this girl! and you can't do
    nothing to save her!" Meowth yelled in anger.

    "pfft! say all that you want!" Iris said while getting angry.

    "Let's move on! Crustle, go now and use X scissor!!!"
    that Pokémon, Crustle, used that attack, and then... the trap was
    getting broken!!!

    "Hang on! we'll save you in no time! Pikachu, finish this trap with
    Thunderbolt!!!"

    and finally...she was all free!!!

    "Whew...now, Glaceon!!! on stage! go now and use ice beam!!!" the
    black haired girl commanded.
    Glaceon did what her owner commanded, and....it got Team Rocket all
    frozen!!!

    "yeah! now, go and use the same attack that your Pikachu did!"

    "Ok! use Thunderbolt one more time!!!"
    and finally...boom!!! the team flew away on the sky!!!

    "We'll be back!!!" Team Rocket yelled.

    then... there was a could of smoke...a few seconds later, the smoke
    had cleared perfectly....the girl opened her eyes, and gasped in
    happiness...

    "Ash? is that you?!"

    he gasped, knowing that the girl was...
    "Onyx!!!!"

    she hugged him and smiled.
    "Uh, who is she?" Iris asked.

    "Whoops, sorry if i didn't told you. she's Onyx, my childhood friend."

    "hi, everyone!" Onyx said while smiling.

    "Hi, Onyx! nice to meet you! I'm Iris and this is my partner Axew!" she
    said and a cute Axew got out of her hair.
    "axew-ew!"

    "wow!!! an Axew!!! i never saw one of this! it's wonderful!!!"

    then, Onyx looked at the green haired boy, and smiled.

    "and who i have the pleasure to talk with too?" Onyx asked while
    smiling.

    "hehe. let me have the pleasure to meet you. i'm Cilan, a Pokémon
    Connoiseur."

    "Nice to meet you, Cilan, and really?! that's great! my parents are
    Pokémon Connoiseurs too!!!"

    "No way!!! that's wonderful!"

    "Yep. i had the idea to became that too, i promised that if i win the
    Unova League. and guess what? i won it." Onyx said.

    "Cool, Onyx! i see that you're not a little kid after all." Iris said while
    giggling.

    "What do you mean by 'Little kid'?

    "it's a long story. i'll tell you later."

    "So, Onyx. what were you doing here?"

    "well, since i won the league, and even i have the eight badges, i
    decided to stay a little more to find new adventures on here."
     
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    Hiyah! Please post separate chapters of your story as other posts not new threads. That way, it doesn't clutter up the library and people can find your next chapter much easier.

    Also, I haven't heard from you in quite a long time, Cilan, it's good to see you again! :D
     
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    I know, I know. Sorry! I was just totally excited! Fine, I'll erase this chapter and i'll re-do it again.

    Yeah yeah, whatever, I came back, after a long time. But I'm thinking wrong of coming back...just don't think that I'll stay. Just delete this chapter, Please?!?! and all done.
     
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    Aww, well I hope you stay. It doesn't need to be deleted, it's not breaking any rules anymore. In fact, this thread is how it should be, with the next chapter in a post in the same thread instead of in a new thread entirely.

    Sorry for not responding earlier, the message system didn't like my computer. >.<
     
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    I'm thinking of staying.
    Really?!? but, it has the second part! and now someone deleted the second chapter! I was just trying to follow what you said.
     
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    I know, I'm sorry, I should have been more clear. The second chapter is in this thread already. I merged the two threads earlier. The one deleted was counted as a multi-post, because the second chapter already exists here.

    Our rule for stories is that it's easier if you post the next chapter as a post in this thread, so that it's easier to find all the chapters to your story. If you just post a lot of threads it's harder to find and more cluttered.

    I think you are able to rename the thread, but if not I can do it for you if that is the problem.
     
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    -.-' damnit.
    I'm so doomed. But it's impossible!!!! I can't do THAT! I broke a rule. To NEVER post the next chapter on the same topic!
     
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    Uh, it's not a big deal. And the rule for lv is to never post a new chapter outside the same topic. I'm sorry, but I think I'd understand a bit better if you explained what was upsetting you clearer so I can help fix that.
     
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    ......That's WHY I told you to DELETE it!!!!! this is it! I'm a failure! I won't write any stories! NEVER!
     
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    ...We did delete it, if you mean the chapter that broke the rules. And technical errors have nothing to do with story-writing, so I do not understand how you have linked a minor technical anomaly with supposed failure in an entirely separate field.

    I don't think there's any more I can personally do to aid this situation, unless you would like me to rename or archive this topic despite the fact that it is perfectly fine. For now though, I'm sorry that this has upset you and I wish you the best.
     
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