Primal's Poem Palace

This is a gallery in which I will post poems as much as I can.​

I hope to get some feedback and some helpful criticism,not any mean insults.​

These poems will all have different themes,the first one I'm posting is a tribute to Paul Walker,an actor who was like a friend to everyone.He died in a car crash.​

This poem is called One More Time...​

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There used to be days,
We would talk and talk
But now those days 've been set ablaze
They've vanished into the air

I just wish that I could see your face,
I feel like a disgrace!
I feel sour like lime,
I just wanna see you one more time

You did evr'y thing with me
But I couldn't help you!
I ran,I left,I flee!
Even when you felt blue

I just wish that I could see your face,
I feel like a disgrace!
I feel sour like lime,
I just wanna see you one more time

The things you did for everyone was like nothin' else
You put them first,before yourself!
You devoted your life to charity
But now it goes to you and me!

I just wish that I could see your face,
I feel like a disgrace!
I feel sour like lime,
I just wanna see you one more time

A charity for a dead man who helped
He gave money to the poor who yelped!
He tried his best to help but what did he get?
A stone grave,cos he is dead!

I just wish that I could see your face,
I feel like a disgrace!
I feel sour like lime,
I just wanna see you one more time

Well that was my first one,more to come!

 

@[member="Teami Kezuka"] Thank you for the compliments Teami! Thing is,I'm actually a very good rapper! I hope you guys like more of my poems

 

I know what you mean anyway...

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This poem is for myself because Ihaveacrushonsomeonebutheyprobablydon'tlikeme!

02/5/15

I Hope


The day I met you
I felt a jolt in my head
The things we could've been
Were never said

My life became gloomy
Dark,miserable and sad
Then he came along
And took you by the hand

I lost my chance to say what I felt
My hopes and my dreams
Became broken pieces
The world still seems...

A world where I hoped
That I would get victory
But I guess I'l never WIN
It isn't meant to be,

And the world seems to become darker...
When it should become bright!
My life falls to the ground
Looks like I'll never see the light

My hopes are no more
My thoughts don't really seem,
To be important
In this dream!

Love doesn't matter,
Love is just a game
Love is when a man
Never gets his say

His pressure takes his face
He sees no more point
His life seems nothing
He does nothing but disappoint

And he hopes and hopes,
But it shall never cease,
This burning love,
His heart will never be pleased!

Yet he still hopes of that day,
When he feels her hand
He'll shout with joy
And his life will be done...
Just as he planned.

this something new by the way

Motto-[SIZE=11pt] If lives gives you lemons, don't make lemonade! Mix it up and create something [/SIZE][SIZE=11pt]UNIQUE![/SIZE]

 

This is a shorter poem but it's nice,it's because I'm doing a school play so why not?

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NEW POEM-Hood

An archer of utmost skill
A green hero
He steals from the rich to give the poor
He is the one who sleeps near willow!

He fights the sheriff and his rules
He's an outlaw of faith
He fights injustice every day
So the sheriff sees his face

He fights and fights,not just for poor
But so he can find his love
he hopes and hopes and tries and tries
But still path is tough

The tournament comes in sight
There's only one thing in his mind
He must be there in time
To win the maiden prize!

He succeeds but it's all a snare!
The sheriff wins this is unfair!
The maiden weeps Robin goes!
The sheriff knows!

Brave followers come to the room,
Maid Marian makes a plan
The followers free the hero
He can be with Maid Marian

The sheriff hears,
He comes to the place
He sees Robin
And pulls an angry face!

The sheriff braces with a sword
And Robin does so too!
The fight and fight,the sheriff falls,
Robin has beaten you!

King Rich returns and all is good!
Nottingham has begun to put things right,
Everyone can now...
See the light!