Request feedback on your writing here!

Just gonna say it again - Please be willing to give others feedback if you want some in return. Don't be surprised if you don't get any feedback if you haven't already quoted some others to give feedback in return first.

 

I would appreciate it if anyone on this site can review my story. It's called "Pokémon Revolution" and it is a fresh story based on original main characters in the setting of the normal Pokémon world(Sinnoh region). The first few chapters may be slow, but the story will pick up speed real quickly.

Link: http://lakevalor.net/topic/16859-pokemon-revolution/

Thank you in advanced!

 

Hey i would like people's opinion on my story, it is called "Pokémon Revival", It is about a high school senoir waking up to find he is a riolu, been shot, and is not in his orginal world. Please let me know what you think and i will say this now, my writing skills improve over the chapter course.

http://lakevalor.net/topic/16985-pokemon-revival/

 

Hi everyone! I'd like some feedback on my fanfic, it's my first ever Pokémon fanfic and the link is in my sig. It's a short story and I'm aiming for a maximum of 3 chapters. Thanks!

 

I am writing two stories, being uploaded on here and on fanfiction. I am fine with reviews on either site (including in the threads, not necessarily here).
http://lakevalor.net/topic/17194-the-ranumta-region/
http://lakevalor.net/topic/17195-the-racnovur-region/

I plan to read and leave reviews on at least the two requests above mine. I'll edit those in once I do. @[member="Venom Wolf"] and @[member="DeviantJTS"]

The Boy Who Changed the World- This seems like an interesting concept. I enjoyed reading what is written so far, and look forward to seeing more in the future.

Pokémon Revival- I only read the first chapter, but I'll probably read more later on. The phrasing could use a bit of work in a lot of places, but the story is fairly interesting so far, and I understood what you were trying to say.

 

Okay, I'm finally brave enough to ask for feedback. *traps Fear from Inside Out under a chair* I CAN DO THIS! My fanfic is The Shaze Syndrome, and it's both on FF.net and here, but it's considerably more developed on FF. I also have Dark Skies, Too Late To Say Sorry, Ash Ketchum and the Gamer's Creed, and TSS (short form b/c I am lazy) parts 1 and 2 up. TSS is a VERY long story, so I chopped it into a few parts. And all of them except the crossover are rated M, so read at your own risk. Please review honestly-if there's something you don't like, tell me! Don't sugarcoat it.
Edit: I've also put up the Po Town drabble I wrote here on FF. Check it out if you want.http://lakevalor.net/topic/17298-why-team-skull-took-over-po-town/
Edit: Here you are; Dark Skies (which I was finally brave enough to put up here: http://lakevalor.net/topic/17296-dark-skies/
And here: TSS the way-too-long story:http://lakevalor.net/topic/17183-the-shaze-syndrome/
#MissingNo

 

Spoiler: 2017 work by Hilda

The King and I (Last Words)
For naught, I suffer no longer
The changing tides bring harmony
In among the wilds
From the very brink
A whisper of words longing in the darkness
Last words spent without change given
The anonymous bring down
I worship a shadow of magic
The fresh air of my former self
A former flame now extinguished
A black rose thrown onto lingering dirt
I spat on the naysayers
With fist clenched and brow risen
A game of swords and shields
A winner announced in secrecy
The past haunts me ever brighter still

Can I get feedback on this piece of poetry I wrote for another site please?
Just to see what you guys reckon of my style currently.

 

I'm willing to give off feedback in turn to obtaining some, although I don't want to upset the format of some works on the forum threads by my own comments. So if people can specify the method of having feedback posts via the thread or other means; let me and others know so we can respond accordingly.

 

Okay, at this point I think I'm ready, there's quite a lot of chapters and... I come to you with my own fanfic of Alola! It's called Team Shadow, and I've been working on it for quite some time now, and I'm quite happy with how it turned out.

 

Been looking a lot at others' fiction, and thought that it was finally time I asked for help. The link is in my signature at the bottom, and is a novelization of PMD : Explorers of Sky. There are some additions of my own, but what I'm working on mostly is my writing style. Anyone, please give it a look. Thanks a ton!

 

I would like some feedback on my Pokémon fanfic: https://lakevalor.net/threads/pokemon-opal-and-garnet.17782/

This contains mainly my own original Pokémon, but will have some existing ones in it, too. There are more chapters to come- 124 more, to be precise. I hope you enjoy!

 

I just looked at your fanfiction, and all I have to say is that IT. IS. AWESOME! Arguably, this is the best fanfiction I have ever seen based on PMEOS. If you could please take a look at- and give me feedback on- my fanfic, Pokémon Opal and Garnet (which contains my own original Pokémon), that would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

 

Greetings, everyone! In case you guys didn't know, my story has been re-edited due to tenses purposes and some dialogue I wanted to improve. I thank my friend, @DiancieIsBae for helping on the re-edits. So again, I wouldn't mind some feedbacks on this fanfic once more in case you guys haven't read it yet. Or if you have, then I suggest re-reading it. Tell me what you guys think about my fanfic as always. ^-^

Click on the signature pic to see the fanfic, btw. c:

 

The layout of the story has already been finalized in just the first chapter, with the scientist attempting something that should almost be near impossible. Incorporating your own ideas into Pokémon was amazing, especially your ability to properly describe Pokémon from Feluv region in few, clean sentences. Nice work on this one!

 

Thank you!!!! Did you read all 18 chapters or just the prologue?

 

I haven't read all of the chapters, but so far I'm at Chapter 4

 

If you want to, feel free to read and comment on my story. It's a work in progress, but I'm trying to update it at least once a week. The chapters aren't too long, but I plan on making the story branch out.

The link: https://lakevalor.net/threads/master-quest.17909/#post-379003

 

Requesting some feedback on my current project. A Hui Hou Kakou, K'ou Alola. I am working on uploading it here from ff.net and my most ambitious project yet. Let me know what y'all think. Appreciate it.

#Valorsquad

 

I'd like feedback on the first chapter of my story, Lost and Found. Also, do you know how to put that orange banner thing by a story that says "Fanfiction"? I'm still new XD

 

I'd like some feedback on this: https://lakevalor.net/threads/the-story-of-pikachu.18349/ It's meant to take about an hour to read and is also a semi-prequel to this: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9979848/1/Earth-s-Protectors