The "REAL" Critique Thread

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THE "REAL" CRITIQUE THREAD​

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(WARNING: If you are an easily offended artist who doesn't like it when other people suggest stuff for your work, this thread is not for you.)​

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Hello there! This thread is for the artists who seek to improve and will take REAL criticism to do so. Here, you may submit an artwork, and I (other members may participate) will critique it to the best of my ability. I will take a look at the colors, outlining, and everything else on it. Basically, I will not tell you "It looks great 10/10", but rather, I will at least try to give you my real and honest thoughts on it.

I got the idea to make this thread and made a status about it a few weeks ago, and it was received well. Many agreed that it could be used to help others improve, so here it is! The process is relatively simple. Just post your art, and I'll Simon Cowell it.

Other members who have suggestions may also participate!

So there we go! I'll be waiting for the first person who wants a critique. Be sure to post your work. This of course is not limited to "drawings". You can also post a short story which I could critique, but seeing as I'm more of a digital art person, won't be as thorough.

 

Hey there, @[member="BlackNeko~Chan"]! Here's my critique:

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To make it easier to understand, I've drawn circles over the areas which could use a bit of work.​

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Let's go over Circle A first. The one thing I immediately noticed was that the open eye was put to the left side of the face (your right) too much. If you look at the face, you can see it's tilted a bit to the side, as only the character's LEFT ear is visible. The way you drew the eye however gives the impression that the face is directly looking at the viewer, which isn't the case because of the ear. The iris is also a bit too large (it covers up almost the entire eye), and as before, it's far too much to the side and bottom part of the face. Gotta at least leave room for cheeks. ​

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On Circle B, the mouth isn't really on the same central point as with the nose. As stated before, since the character is tilting his head to his right (your left) a bit, then the mouth should also be on the bigger side. Even characters with "side-mouths" in anime obey this rule.​

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Circle C isn't as serious, but rather me just finding little details that could use some work. Legs are made up of two parts, the upper and lower leg. On the drawing (though this may be a stylistic choice), the legs look really rubbery. If you were going for a style like the Adventure Time show where the characters have an infinite number of joints in their limbs, it would be understandable, but judging from the way you drew the eyes, this was probably based more on an anime-ish style.​

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Now onto the last. Circle D. I'm not sure if the shoes only cover half of his feet or those are slippers with missing bottoms. Anatomy-wise, ONLY a tiny percentage of male characters will be able to wink, put a hand in a pocket on his jeans, and do "ballerina feet" all at the same time. It would probably be better if you just drew him standing up, because the feet make the entire pose seem awkward.​

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Also, try making your outlines much more visible, since I notice you tend to go over them in coloring.​

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That's basically it. I hope I didn't offend you with this honest critique. Good luck! ​

 

Damn, I haven't replied to these. XD

One artwork at a time from now on please. Have mercy. xD

@[member="silentlightness"]

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You've got consistency as your main problem on the Charizard work. You already have a firm grasp of shading from the looks of it.

A - The arms look different from one another. For example, from the elbow to the wrist, one arm starts thicker and becomes thinner. The other one starts thinner and ends up thicker.

B - One foot is bigger than the other. The perspective of the left (our left) knee being tucked in further back doesn't work because of how the claws are drawn facing the viewer instead of straight down, which messes up perception.

C - I noticed you hastily shaded the tail.

D - The end joint of the wing's blue part isn't visible. Also, the first two joints of the wing are WAAAAAY bigger than the ones on the other side.



On this one, I can see you're trying to have TWO focal points, which isn't a good thing to do with a drawing like this.

A - Kirito is a relatively thin character, and if it weren't for the title of the file, I wouldn't know it was him. His neck needs to be a little thinner, and I suggest you work on capturing the likenesses of a character. The clothes are also a bit vague.

B - He has really tiny feet. Most feet are not rectangular in shape too. I see no sign of both of them wearing pants.

C - The swords would not be THAT high in the air unless they're embedded onto Kirito and Asuna. Kirito's sword looks like it was stabbed into his back. Asuna's sword got shoved into her head. This is what I meant when I said you had two focal points. The swords DO NOT need to be super visible, because they're swords. Lower them so that they actually look embedded into the ground.

D - Asuna's left arm isn't touching or leaning on her leg at all. Try to do that pose in real life, and it will be really hard to maintain it. Either it needs to be folded in more towards her and leaning on the knee, covering part of it, or just altogether put on the ground for balance.

@[member="Iceixient"]

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First of all, HELL YEAH DESTINY! HUNTERS4LYF

A - You did a great job with the Arc Light on the knives. What I find lacking however is that they don't actually wind around the knives despite their shape. All of the electricity is essentially between the knife and the viewer. None of the sparks actually go behind the knife.

B - Not really a huge thing, but the body is bent in such a way that the armor wouldn't usually allow that much flexibility in the abdominal area. It's just nitpicking, because there's really only a few mistakes on this piece. XD

C - The cape is a bit too large, but I understand the effect. Again, just nitpicking.



Few mistakes here as well.

A - I find the overuse of a single brush distasteful. Nothing beats an old-fashioned round-brush digital painting. The repeating textures are a bit of an eyesore.

B - The character's sleeves are drawn in such a way that it looks like the arm is bent backwards.

@[member="Magpaeonia"] i h8 u

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You know I love this piece how dare you?

A - Get rid of the palette thing after you use it, haha!

B - Phoenix's sword should logically be in front of Edgeworth, since his hand is extended outwards to the side because of Edgeworth's own attack. It would make little sense for a rapier to be used on a person who has his back turned.

C - Crossguard, crossguard, crossguard. It's meant to guard the fingers. I hate you. XD



A - Try to have more definition on the chin area, because I myself find it very distracting, haha. I guess you could make the neck a little thinner as well.

B - The clouds could have been colored differently to contrast the similarly-colored dress frilly things. Make them more blue perhaps, and add a couple more clouds in between for more depth.

C - The text could use some work, haha.

D - BLIND, LEGLESS BIRDS AAAAGGHH!!!

 

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A - I noticed that you added little decorative "ornaments" and they look a bit out of place. Did you scale them non-uniformly?

B - Try avoiding pure black when doing artwork, as the color doesn't really blend well. You also might want to add some more detail on the text. Perhaps make it 3-D? Add a drop-shadow?

C - I see a tiny border, but it's too... hidden, I guess is the word. Try to make a solid 1 pixel white border around the image set on OVERLAY.