Request feedback on your writing here!

Seems interesting so far.

 

I think you click on thread tool and click on the word that says 'prefix' next to your thread title. You should see the word "Fanfiction" within the options. Hope that helps and just for helping you out, I'll take a read on your fanfic. c:

 

Thank you

 

No problem. And by the way, your fanfic has catch my interest. I do have to say that it was written differently than mine. Being that it was written in past tense, which I don't mind, and that the characters speaks to each other within the same paragraphs. This used to confused me at first but now, I'm starting to know who speaks who. Overall, I like it and couldn't wait to see more of it.

Speaking of fanfic, you can take a read of mine if you like. It's in my signature as said underneath this comment post. c:

 

Cool, I'll be sure to look at it

 

Hey, all, I just posted the prologue and first chapter of a new fanfiction, Pokémon: Red. Would love a review, either here, or at FFN. Comments can include general impressions, places where the pacing seemed too slow or too fast, what helped or hurt your interest, things that connected or resonated with you, places where reading felt like extra work, references you got, stuff that went over your head, plush ego massages, or anything else that strikes you. I'm currently planning on writing between assignments this semester, maybe at the pace of a chapter or two a month, but we'll see how that goes!

Links:

Lake Valor Library post: https://lakevalor.net/threads/pokémon-red.18485

Fanfiction.net post: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12598691/1/Pokémon-Red


Synopsis: The original Pokémon journey like never experienced before. In 1998, a kid from Earth takes his first steps into the Pokémon World. There, as he rises to the challenge of the Indigo Plateau, he must unravel the mystery behind an ancient civilization uniting the multiverse and confront a sinister organization whose tampering with time and space threatens the very fabric of reality. Originally published on Fanfiction.net.

 

I left a review of your work on Fanfiction. I really love the idea and can't wait to see the rest of the story develop.

 

Greetings Jacoman52 good sir. The name's Sonic Ramon, as you could tell my the left side of this post, and I wanted to inform you my opinions on your fanfic: It's interesting. The writing is done well and the characters are fine. The only problem I had with it is the prologue being a bit too long for the story. I'm fine with things taking its time and setting up the mood but don't like it when it drags a bit too long. Especially when it can lead to someone getting bored of the story and almost quit on it. But I eventually got past prologue and things gotten interesting since then. I also looked up Satoshi Taijri to see if him liking insects were true and wow, it is true. And you executed that amazingly! Overall, I can't wait to see more of the story and wonder how it'll go. Funny bit here: While I was reading the fanfic, I saw the part in chapter 1 where they mentioned Pokémon merchandise and was like "Oh right! This is a Pokémon fanfic! Thought I was reading another story or something.

But anyway, that is my overall opinion towards it. x3
Edit: On that note, if you ever want to take a read on mine, you can. Just let me know what you think about it in PMs on LV, in this thread, or in DMs on Discord.

 

Much obliged! I'll take a look at your story, too!

 

Thanks. n3n

 

Could anyone give me feedback on Lost and Found? I feel like I could definitely improve.... lol

 

I gotcha, is it on fanfiction? Or is it uploaded here?

 

Both. Although I'm not sure if my third chapter is on FF yet

 

Hello, it's me again! For those of you who haven't read it yet, I would like some feedback on my new fanfic, PokeCountries: Or, What Happened After the Events of the Second Pokémon World War. I hope you enjoy it!

https://lakevalor.net/threads/pokéc...events-of-the-second-pokemon-world-war.18540/

By the way, if you have any feedback that you would like to post on my story, feel free to do so.

 

I have two stories that I would like to get feedback for if possible:

Rosa's New Perspective: https://lakevalor.net/threads/rosas-new-perspective.18635/

Fairytale of Paradise Kingdom: https://lakevalor.net/threads/fairytale-of-paradise-kingdom.18760/

Both of these are ongoing stories but I would to grab any feedback or ideas from people should they want to give it

 

I have one story to show, so enjoy.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12638107/1/A-New-Future
This is basically my attempt at making a backstory to the main protagonist and Grovyle in PMD2. Just a little thing I wanted to do for a good while.

 

Hi! I was wondering if anyone would be willing to give some feedback on my story, Now is Not The Time to Use That, and give me some pointers on areas where I can improve. I'll read and give feedback on your stories in return. Here's the link:

https://lakevalor.net/threads/now-is-not-the-time-to-use-that.18275/

Let me know what you think, and be sure to provide a link to your own work as well.

 

I'd like some feedback about To Catch a Mew, my fan fic. I've managed to update it to Episode 18, where I'm currently at on fanfic.net so you guys are all caught up.

 

I write Amourshipping fanfictions on FFN.Net , and it would be really awesome if you could check out my latest story, link here: fanfiction.net/s/12516756/1/For-a-Competition-of-Dreams I hope I see you guys there!

 

HAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII I'd like to request feedback on both:
The first chapter of my fanfic on Lake Valor.
AAAND my fanfic on FF.net.

Link to my fanfic on here:
https://lakevalor.net/threads/different.18353/

And on FF.net:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12377450/1/Different

Don't judge the first 3 chapters or so. After that, it becomes better.